
Since the day she’d come back to town after her escape, as she had often described it, to the Marine Corps, she had ceased to fit in.
Why? The townsfolk couldn’t explain it, but she’d “seen the world” and now it seemed as though she just couldn’t actually come home and be. She was someone else now after the two tours in Afghanistan, and the little girl who had once worked the farm with her aunt and uncle, rode her little pink bike to the small school at the end of town and sang in the choir at Our Lord’s Blessed Redemption at the age of six had been replaced by a stranger.
She hid behind the bug-eyed sunglasses she’d picked up in New York City on her flight home, and the way she wore scarves was reminiscent of those old black-and-white movies. She was a regular Aubrey Hepburn, all slender hips and elegance, a smile for most but little else as if she was just a Hollywood starlet swinging through town to get a glimpse at the simple folks of Two Forks for an upcoming role.
Dot – she was named after her grandmother – hung out at the farm most of the time. She was all that was left of the family after Emily and Jake Gale passed away in a terrifying car crash while on their way to church only two weeks after she’d returned. She was something of an oddity, to say the least, but she was polite when she came into town twice each week – one trip for supplies, another to sit quietly in the back of the church as if she felt some sense of duty to her mother, who had always preached the Lord’s good word. Dot always had a smile for the locals, of which she was still one, and she stopped by the lone fire house every time to chat with the boys - they knew something about risking lives, but her smile never quite extended beyond the end of her nose, as if its true warmth was reserved for someone else.
Perhaps part of it was the Colt .45 caliber she often toted around with her. Not one for a purse, as such, she often had it holstered on her waist as if she were Annie Oakley herself, ready to pull it free and take out the nearest outlaw gunman. The law stipulated that she could legally carry it like that, and she had remarked more than once that there were often critters out at the farm and low-lifes in town that necessitated its wear. She was half-right about each, although it was unlikely the various jackalopes and prairie foxes were much of a threat. Certainly Andy and Mikey were more threatening and more annoying. Dot stayed clear of both types of animals and kept Toto – she called the Browning “Toto” – close-by. His bark, she liked to say, was nothing compared to his bite.
Luckily for her, she could handle herself pretty well without Toto, or our story would have turned out right different. Andy, having finally convinced Mikey that Dot had the hots for him, led the way out to the old farm about three miles down old Kansas 171. They were both lit after a few drinks at Ace’s Booze Barn and Drive-Away, and while Mikey had preached common sense and the long walk home, Andy would have nothing to do with it and promptly fired up his new Mustang, brow-beat Mikey into the passenger’s seat, and tore off down 171 at a steady weave.
The problem with Toto is that he didn’t give much warning being a pistol and all. His bark and bite were ferocious, but only if Dot knew that he was needed. She never saw the Mustang pull up in front of the old farmhouse, never heard the boys whispering amongst themselves and scrambling around back to the unlocked kitchen door. She was sitting at the old desk with her headphones on, iPod blaring ACDC, checking Weather.com and wondering about the storm coming on in a hurry across the plains. She didn’t hear them at all, but the years of hand-to-hand training she’d swung in the Marines paid off when they grabbed her and pulled her to the floor.
Andy got out of the house right quick, screaming and clutching his bloody face. Mikey vomited twice, his crushed testicle sending him sobbing into the cornfield out back. Dot, however, laid solemnly on the floor, her blouse ripped open, denim skirt pulled up over her hips. She was no longer in any danger, but the blow to the back of her head had proven too much, and she lay inches away from Toto, “Highway to Hell” still squealing in the background, Andy’s left eye clutched in her bloody hand.
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15 comments:
Now that's a much better Dorothy than the sugar sweet one in the movie!
More realistic and (to my mind - I may be slightly twisted mind) connectible for the reader.
I love the foreshadowing of her checking the weather and wondering about the storm.
I also think that Dot ripping her assailants eye out of the socket a was a nice touch, very definitely telling the reader that this story is going to be much more gritty and dark than the movie ever was!
Brilliant!
I have just found my new Heroine!! Did I even spell that correctly?? It doesn't matter...I LOVE DOT!!! She's a familiar stranger at home...I know the feeling. Of course..being just the ex wife of a Marine, I have had none of the training she went through, unless you count wrestling my kids down to the ground to take their medicine count!
I AM IN LOVE!! And I can't wait to read MORE! MORE! MORE!!
She actually does what other Marines say they can do... take that! ;) So glad I started reading this!
We are very glad, too!!! :)
that is way better! nothing better than a ruthless girl showing little farm boys how work is really done! bravo!
This Dorothy definitely is a better heroine and role model for girls than the original one ;)
Also, the writing is very good, sets a good pace!
This is so stupid. Who wrote this rubbish? I think that it is a waste of time and why would anybody want to read it, I sure dont and I never will read another one either. Make it better, like get somebody to have their head blown off and stuff and then it would be better. Just, anything but what that is. I didn't like it. Improve it and then maybe I will like it. Tell me when you improve it. My name is Shaun and my email is shaunwantspeace123@gmail.com.
Wow... I'm absolutly impressed... I would be glad to write things like this... and I'm really interessted in the whole story... think I have to go back and read further... :)
And by the way: I think that should have been the real Story of Oz... ;)
And I think you get a place in my blog-roll... ;)
The Wizard of Oz used to be my favorite movie as a kid. How I JUST discovered this is a shock to me! This is the ish! I've got some seriouse reading to do! Awesome job!
I just finished 'Son of a Witch' the second in the 'Wicked' series (Haven't read the first and then coincidentally a friend posted a link to this.
Serendipitous indeed as I was looking for another Oz fix.
i hope you've enjoyed it! :)
Just found this. Only read the 1st one so far. Would it insult you Scott and gang that it reminded me of the Steven Kins style in his Tower series? I can't wait to read more.
haven't read the Tower series, so i wouldn't know. just hoping you like this. five authors means five different writing styles. plus, they were initially given no direction at all and told to do whatever they wanted with their characters and i would pull it together later. i think it worked out really well. :)
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